My literature teacher ask me to invent a poem about to differents points of view of love.. This is what i create
Some he appears and sometimes fly,
take him if you can, if not yoy will cry.
Love is necesary, without love we die.
Love is a deseption, the only he gaves you is frustration.
He makes you enjoy and then makes you fell as a toy.
You must have it away of you,
or you will get shame on you.
This was the opinion of a little girl and a little boy.
The girl opinion was romantic and dramatic.
But the boy oppinion was different, becuase que will don't like to be accident in love.
Very good work Franco! Your poem is well developed. It seems to me that the boy is trying to avoid something that has already happened to him, whether he realises or not.
ResponderEliminarThe first two stanzas could have inverted commas, so that it´s clear for the reader that they are two different speeches. If not, there seems to be a contradiction until we get to the last stanza and we find out it was two characters speaking.
A couple of corrections:
- There some typing mistakes that could have been corrected if you had revised your entry before publishing.
- The last line is much longer than others, you could split it. The correct grammar form would be:
"But the boy´s opinion was different,
because he wouldn't like to be accidentally in love."
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